Physical Abuse Poem

So when I was writing the post about abusive relationships, it gave me another idea for another class. I am in 6th hour creative writing and we are working on poems. We were told to make a unit piece for Iambic meter and my poem was based upon an abusive relationship. Here it goes.

I stare at the ceiling from my cozy bed,

Trying to get these thoughts out of my head.

Running fast then slow like a broken movie tape,

Tell me why I feel I need to escape.

Out of this world I need to be led.

I pull the blankets up over my swollen face.

How could I let this happen, I'm such a disgrace.

We were perfectly fine, joking around like a normal couple.

Then all of a sudden my vision began to double.

The blood in my mouth I could taste.

I push you away but you still swing those hands.

I start to bed as I lose count of the lands.

Next thing I know I'm laying on the cold floor.

Someone stands over me saying "that's enough man, no more".

How grateful I am of that persons demands.

I pull the blankets down and wipe away the tears.

This is what I get after all of the years?

You know, it's okay though, I'll be fine by myself.

I can't think of you but rather my own health.

So goodbye love and my worst fears.

This isn't a true situation, it just came to mind as I began to write. A lot of people told me it was really good but what do you think? Does it run smoothly? Go with the abusive relationship well?